The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the percentage of three different
electricity
sources produced in four major countries from 2003 to 2008.
Overall
,
while
Vietnam and
India
produced considerably higher
electricity
from fossil
fuel
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fuels
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,
Sweden
and Morocco appeared to harness
hydro
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hydropower
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power
as their main
electricity
source. Only
India
and
Sweden
had
electricity
produced from nuclear
power
. Among
four
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the four
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mentioned nations,
India
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India's
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electricity
depended mostly on fossil fuel, which accounted for over
four fifths
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. Meanwhile,
Sweden
and Morocco used only 4 per
cent
and 5 per
cent
this
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of this
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source, respectively, for
electricity
production.
Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
was used mainly in Morocco, which made up 95 per
cent
, followed by
Sweden
, where over
a
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apply
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half
electricity
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of electricity
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production was responsible by
hydro
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hydropower
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power
,
while
India
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India's
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electricity
production
depended
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14 per
cent
on
this
source, which was the smallest figure compared to other nations. Nuclear
power
,
however
, was exploited only in
India
and
Sweden
, which
consituted
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constituted
4 per
cent
and 44 per
cent
, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, india, sweden, power, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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