Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem.

Crime rate is something that has been increasing constantly over the years. One of the many reasons is, more atrocities being carried out by prisoners after finishing their
first
punishment. I shall discuss different aspects of
this
in the following paragraphs. Jails nowadays have become a junction for different crime
committers
a special group delegated to consider some matter
committees
commuters
to meet under a single roof. The probability of one getting to know others in
such
places increases, eventually leading to good socialization among them. So even if someone decides to stop the crimes, it becomes difficult for that individual to come out of the jaws of these gangsters when they are out of the premises and
hence
they are drawn to more illicit jobs. Sometimes the offenders are mistreated by officers while serving their sentences, which turns out to have a negative impact on them. They become more vicious and intolerant towards the system. By the time they are out after their
first
punishment, they
are transformed
Suggestion
transform
into beasts to take on the same system. Their psychological mindset changes and draws them towards negative shades of the society. These infants of crime
also
learn new techniques from other subordinates. In conclusion, one cannot deny the fact that, all
first
timers of prisons do not end up in doing anti-social activities, but there is a large group of them who can, if they are mistreated and
gelled
(usually followed by 'with' or used as a combining form) generously supplied with
filled
with other inmates.
This
can be controlled by taking right measure by the government.

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