The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.
The graph gives information regarding people going to cinemas on different days in a European country in 2003, 2005 and 2007. For
year
2003, the figure Change the article
the year
color
is blue, Change the spelling
colour
2005
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in 2005
for
red, 2007 Change preposition
apply
for
green.
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apply
According to
the graph, people often went to cinemas mostly on Friday
, Saturday
and Sunday. However
, among them, Saturday
holds the trophy for having the most audiences in
each Change preposition
apply
year
, especially in 2005; making around
45% of Change preposition
up around
population
. Add an article
the population
On the other hand
, Monday is the lowest out of all, having merely around 8% in 2007. Interestingly, on Friday
in each year
, the figures are the same spot, which means that there is no difference of
the number on Change preposition
in
Friday
.
To specify, in 2003, the graph is in
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apply
the
stable, Correct article usage
apply
starts
from 10% to 40%, Wrong verb form
starting
then
it goes down to 30% on Sunday. Kind of similar to the previous year
, the growth is also
stable. However
, there is a quite big jump between Thursday and Friday
. It increases from around 13% to 30%. At last
, in 2007, the growth is quite massive each day, especially on
Wednesday to Change preposition
from
Saturday
.
This
concludes that most people enjoy going to cinemas on Saturday
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