Nowadays children mostly spend time playing computer games rather than sports. What is the reason for this? it is a negative or positive development.

It is true that pupils mostly spent their
time
on
computer
games while they
fouced
being in focus or brought into focus
focused
on physical sports. In
this
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an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
I will
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to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
discus
causes
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the causes
and it
this
development good or not for children. There are many reasons why children
not like
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aren't liking
sport rather
then
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than
computer
games.
Firstly
, in
modren
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
Modern
era child depend on technology they like only play
computer
games
.
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, in these days parents don't proper
fouces
the concentration of attention or energy on something
focus
on
their
in or at that place
there
because of
busy schedule
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a busy schedule
. Most of
time
spent by children in school and tuition because in
this
is competition era every student
get
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gets
first
rank. When they
are
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are, then they
are then they
then
then
they spent their spare
time
on
computer
games and rejuvenate their mind.
On the other hand
it is
nagative development
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a negative development
negative development
because if
adolescents
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the adolescents
spent their
time
on
computer
games
then
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than
they could
faced
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face
many problems related to their health like, obesity, eyes weakness and many more. After that they don't part in physical games and like loneliness. Children become aggressive if they play PC games and they do not like
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spending
their leisure
time
with grandparents as well as no give respect them
.
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Overall, if children spent their
time
playing
computer
games
then
they faced
alo
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a lot
t of problems and it is the responsibility of
parents the
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parents, they
y should proper care of their children and encourage them for physical sports

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