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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The tables illustrate the
amount
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number
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 of
sales
 in
million
euros
 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in five European countries in two years, 1999 and 2004.
Overall
, the first and
second
 place
of
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 usage of both coffee and bananas is for
UK
 and
Switzerland
 in 1999 and 2004
while
 Sweden almost has the least consumption of both in those years.
Although
Switzerland
sales
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 3
million
euros
 of Fairtrade-labelled of coffee in 1999 which was two times more
that
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than
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UK
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the UK
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,
but
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in 2004
UK
sales
is
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 slightly 3 times more
that
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than
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Switzerland
. The
sales
 of Denmark and Sweden
remains
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 steady and
it
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changes
only
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 0.2
million
of
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euros
 but 70%
sales
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of sales
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increasing
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 recorded for Denmark, from 1 to 1.7 MM
euros
. The
amount
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number
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 of
sales
 for bananas was 15
million
of
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euros
 for
Switzerland
 in 1999 which increases to 47
million
of
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euros
.
However
, the most rate of growth belonged to
UK
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the UK
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 which is 5.5 multiplying, from 1 to 5.5 MM
euros
. The only country
decreased
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that decreased
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, is Denmark with
the
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approximately becoming half from 2 to 0.9
million
euros
.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, million, euros, uk, switzerland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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