we cannot help everyone in the world that needs helps, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The writer’s view, there is a hot debate over helping to the everybody that needs it to run the universe. But the priority in each society should attend their situation.
However
, I
also
disagree with the idea that we should help them at any price. For
this
purpose, there are different ways.
Firstly
, it is clearly fanciful that we can help all the needy people in the run the cosmos.
Furthermore
, every country or each one faces the more problems.
Moreover
, in most countries the issue of deficit the budget is an important obstacle to aim for giving opportunities to people for a better life with more amenities.
In addition
, should the governments or each person helps to other people in the macrocosm, it would be hard to attend their people, and it could be causing problems
such
as destitute, jobless and so on.
Secondly
, for helping to the people who are needing it, there are different ways that do not necessarily need government or persons. Admittedly, should they tend to help the other people, they would help to them by own expense.
In addition
, for
this
case, international and regional institutions and organization were created.
For example
, the red cross or red crescent has helped the people who hand to mouth in the run the vale. More specifically, the people have suffered from war or natural disasters. In conclusion, the best way to help every person who have suffered from war or natural disasters or more needed people, use the mechanisms of international or regional institutions, and either individually or voluntarily, nor governmental aids in every country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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