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The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
science
 qualifications in
Malaysia
 and Singapore.
Overall
, both
the
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countries show a decreasing rate of
science
 qualifiers up to
master’s
degree
.
Although
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
science
 qualifications in
master’s
degree
 is
same
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the same
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 for both
the
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countries,
Malaysia
 outraces Singapore in no
science
 qualification at all. In
Malaysia
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,Malaysia
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 around 65 %
people
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of people
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 do not opt for
science
whereas
school
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schools
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 leaving exams in
Science
 are qualified by 35%
students
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of students
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.
However
, less number of
students
 go for higher studies with a percentage of about 20% for
Bachelor’s
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a Bachelor’s
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Degree
 reaching a low point of about 3.5% for
Master’s
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a Master’s
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Degree
. Singapore houses around 60%
people
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of people
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having
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 no interest in
science
 qualifications.
Although
,
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apply
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 30%
students
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of students
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 choose
science
 in school leaving exams, only 20%
students
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of students
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 qualify bachelor’s
degree
.
This
 country
also
 contains less than 4 %
people
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of people
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 who pass out with
master’s
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a master’s
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degree
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degrees
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 just as in
case
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the case
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 of
Malaysia
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words science, malaysia, master’s, degree, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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