Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters ( such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matter that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some people believe that if young children make their decisions by
self
this
will make them
fearlful but
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fearful, but
fearful but
I disagree
this
argument and say decision making by
children
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the children
themselves make them independent.
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essay Some people think that children should not be allowed to make decisions
by
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of
their own
,
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,
whilst
others believes
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others, believes
that if young children make their decisions by
self
this
will make them fearless but before going on
this
view I will present arguments of
opposite side
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the opposite side
.
Firstly
, A bunch of people find it a detrimental concept that children do and opt everything by
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owners
owner
because they assume in
this
way children only think about
self
happiness and do not think about others. A study by an Indian university in 1980 concluded that 30 percent children who were grown up without
help
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the help
of their parents became
self
centered
being or placed in the center
centred
and egocentric.
Moreover
, they did not care about their elders.
Although
, I believe
this
assumption
do not apply
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does not apply
on
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to
for
everyone. On the
contrarily
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contrary
, the view that I am supporting that children in
this
contemporary era are aware about what is wrong and right.
Furthermore
, they become
self
reliant and
this
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
also
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of
parents. A study done by Oxford University concluded that the young ones who do every task without the assist
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have relatively more opportunities to become successful as compared to those which rely for everything
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about
parenting. To sum up, everything notion
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has
drawbacks and positives mutually,
nevertheless
, giving freedom to
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a new, younger generation
a new younger generation
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the act
an act
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provides
many outcomes that totally outweighs its adverse effects and I believe
this
manner plays a revolutionary part if endorsed by every parent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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