Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters ( such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matter that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some people believe that if young children make their decisions by

self

this

will make them

fearlful but

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fearful, but

fearful but

I disagree

this

argument and say decision making by

children

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the children

themselves make them independent.

This

essay Some people think that children should not be allowed to make decisions

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their own

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whilst

others believes

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others, believes

that if young children make their decisions by

self

this

will make them fearless but before going on

this

view I will present arguments of

opposite side

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the opposite side

Firstly

, A bunch of people find it a detrimental concept that children do and opt everything by

own

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owners

owner

because they assume in

this

way children only think about

self

happiness and do not think about others. A study by an Indian university in 1980 concluded that 30 percent children who were grown up without

help

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the help

of their parents became

self

centered

being or placed in the center

centred

and egocentric.

Moreover

, they did not care about their elders.

Although

, I believe

this

assumption

do not apply

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does not apply

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for

everyone. On the

contrarily

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contrary

, the view that I am supporting that children in

this

contemporary era are aware about what is wrong and right.

Furthermore

, they become

self

reliant and

this

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

also

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parents. A study done by Oxford University concluded that the young ones who do every task without the assist

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have relatively more opportunities to become successful as compared to those which rely for everything

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about

parenting. To sum up, everything notion

have

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has

drawbacks and positives mutually,

nevertheless

, giving freedom to

new younger generation

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a new, younger generation

a new younger generation

act

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the act

an act

that

provide

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provides

many outcomes that totally outweighs its adverse effects and I believe

this

manner plays a revolutionary part if endorsed by every parent.

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