The table below show the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table
provide
information about the Change the verb form
provides
numbers
of people who visited Ashdown Museum before and after the Fix the agreement mistake
number
refurbished
process that happened in the museum Replace the word
refurbishment
while
the supplied pie charts measure the level of satisfaction of the visitors
in
Change preposition
at
both
times.
Overall
, comparing both
pie charts, it is clear that
the percentage of visitors
who are pleased increased significantly while
the dissatisfaction level decreased. As a
result
the number of Add a comma
,result
visitors
became more
which can be seen in the supplied table.
Before the enhancement, the Correct quantifier usage
apply
visitors
who voted satisfied was
almost a Correct subject-verb agreement
were
third
of the total visitors
while
15% voted extremely satisfied in the survey. Meanwhile, high
figure of 40% shows dissatisfaction and Correct article usage
a high
one tenth
Add a hyphen
one-tenth
very
dissatisfied. A tiny proportion of Add a missing verb
is very
visitors
did not participate in the survey.
On the other hand
, the development almost doubled the guests
who were very happy Correct quantifier usage
number of guests
while
satisfied
portion increased by 10% reaching 40%. Correct article usage
the satisfied
By contrast
, both
dissatisfied and very dissatisfied dropped substantially to 15% and 10% respectively. Comparing both
pie charts, the proportion of guests with no response stood at 5% in in
Change preposition
at
both
times.Submitted by ashraf.raziq on
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