Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?

There are a number of arguable global issues we have to deal with or we are facing.
However
, it has been a really long time since I saw or heard those who talked about
art
, which can mean, nowadays,
people barely are
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people are barely
interested in
art
and turn their focus away from it. It is understandable why people do not much care about
art
. It is mainly because we have many other issues we take care of and there are loads of entertainment we can enjoy (
For example
, music, TV show, computer games and socialising with our friends).
Nevertheless
, It is crucial keeping our interests in
art
, in order to cherish it.
This
essay will be
further
discussed
on
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in
this
issue, based on my thoughts.
To begin
with,
art
represents our history and culture. In fact, many youth and foreigners learn our history and culture through exploring our artwork or sculpture at a museum or
art
gallery. Not only that, there is no doubt that all styles of our architecture are based on our traditional
art
. We have to remember that thanks to traditional our own
art
, we can live in an artistic and spectacular building and interior.
Secondly
,
art
is a quite important role of income for
government
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governments
the government
all over the world. To take tourism an example, Artists have immense power to attract tourists who are one of the major revenue for the country. It is noticeable how much the French government
earn
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earns
money from tourists who fancy the artwork and architecture in France. To sum up, we need to be more grateful for our
art
and artist rather than pursuing new entertainment or our business. Government should be required to promote their own
art
and make a constant investment in preserving and developing it.
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