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1. Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The problem of
noise
 pollution is currently increasing in the modern society. While some individuals believe the levels of
noise
 being created should be strictly controlled, I would argue that people should have the right to produce
noise
 if they want to. On the one hand, there are several reasons why the government should control the amount of
noise
 produced. The
first
 reason is that too much
noise
 can significantly affect people's health. Living in a place
that is
 too noisy can cause problems
such
 as headaches, which can decrease the health levels of people, especially old ones.
Additionally
,
noise
 can disturb people's work or study.
For example
, a university student will not be able to concentrate on his preparation for exams if his
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 keep singing too loud.
On the other hand
, I believe people can make as much
noise
 as they want because of some reasons.
Firstly
, producing
noise
 is sometimes considered a type of recreational activities.
For instance
, singing or cheering for a football club can be relaxing, and everyone has the right to do those things.
Secondly
, as the world is becoming more modern, people have found ways to deal with the problem of
noise
. Scientists have invented walls and windows that can block out the
noise
, which allows individuals to focus on their work without being disturbed.
Therefore
, the problem of
noise
 can be reduced and there is no need for people to keep quiet. In conclusion, while there are reasons why the levels of
noise
 should be limited, I believe people should have the right to make
noise
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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