Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In recent years, countries are more identical due to the citizens’ ability to buy the same things wherever they are. In my point of view,
this
is the positive path of development for the world’s economy and equality. I will shed light on
this
view in
futher
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
details as follows. Nowadays, people are able to afford similar items is an indication for a more equal world in prosperity term. Compared with the past when there were numerous gap between
countries
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the countries
in individual aspects, economic especially, citizens in developed countries could have their high standard necessities available on their supermarket shelves, while ones in developing countries found it hard to purchase those items. The development brings out the advantages that both of them can buy those
item
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items
easier. That makes the world more equal in everyone’s right to approach
product
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the product
, including equivalent ways and prices.
On the other hand
, an exotic goods investment could attribute transportation
industry
to grow, whereas manufacturing
industry
could be
encourage
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encouraged
by making the purchase of products. Some goods are unique in some geographic areas,
thus
they
needs
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need
to be dispensed to consumers from
rest
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the rest
of the world with the helps of transportation and logistics
industry
.
Besides
, people seem more likely to adapt to live in
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
countries as they can gain access to the same products. It is partly prompt the manufacturing
industry
to thrive. In conclusion, that people’s equivalent ability to buy the same things makes nations became alike has positive progress in both
economic
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economies
.
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