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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates people who consumed the
amount
 of
fish
 and some distinct kinds of meat in
European
 from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
, the
amount
of
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consumption
 of chicken reached the highest point over the period of 25 years,
while
this
 figure
of
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for
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beef
, lamb and
fish
 witnessed a decrease between 1979 and 2004. In 1979, the figure
of
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for
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consumption
Correct article usage
the consumption
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 of
beef
 was the highest in a
European
 country, at approximately 220
grams
person
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per person
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 per
week
.
However
,
this
amount
 of
consumption
 of both chicken and lamb
were
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was
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 lower than that of
beef
 in 1979, at exactly 150
grams
person
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per person
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 per
week
 and about 140
grams
person
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per person
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 per
week
 respectively,
while
 the number of people consuming the
amount
 of
fish
 in 1979 in a
European
 country was the lowest only about 65
grams
person
 per
week
. After
over
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a 25
year-period
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year period
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, the figure
of
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for
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consumption
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the consumption
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 of chicken witnessed a dramatic rise to exactly 250
grams
person
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per person
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 per
week
.
In contrast
,
the
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in the
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 2004s experienced a sharp drop in the
consumption
 of both
Beef
 and Lamp in a
European
 country to over 100
grams
person
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per person
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 per
week
 and approximately 60
grams
person
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per person
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 per
week
 respectively,
while
 the
amount
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number
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 of people who consumed the
amount
 of
fish
to drop
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dropped
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 to the lowest point in 2004, at under 50
grams
person
 per
week
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, fish, european, consumption, beef, grams, person, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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