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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions in Edinburg.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions in Edinburg.
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The line graph describes changes in the proportion of
tourists
 visiting four different attractions
of
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Edinburgh, Scotland (
Aquarium
,
castle
,
zoo
 and festival) within 30 years from 1980 to 2010. In 1980,
Festival
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the Festival
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 of Edinburgh attracted the most
visitors
 ( 30% of
tourist
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tourists
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), followed by
castle
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the castle
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 and
aquarium
 with 24% and 20% of
visitors
 respectively. The figure
of
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for
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the
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zoo
 was only 10% which was the lowest rate. In 2010, after 3 decades of changes,
number
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a number
the number
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 of
tourists
 visiting
Castle
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the Castle
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 remarkably increased and became the most
attracted
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 place for
visitors
 with over 30% of
tourists
. Festival witnessed a slight decrease from 30% in 1980 to 27% in 2010.
Proportion
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The proportion
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 of
tourists
 to
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the aquarium
an aquarium
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aquarium
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aquariums
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in Edinburgh noticeably decreased and dropped to below 10% in 2010. The figure for
visitors
of
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to
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the zoo
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zoo
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zoos
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 fluctuated around 12% in 20 years ( 1980 to 2000) and
then
 went up to 20%
at the end
 of the period of time. In general,
proportions
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the proportions
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 of
tourists
of
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in
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 Scotland
visited
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who visited
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Zoo
 and
castle
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castles
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withnessed
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witnessed
upward trends from 1980 to 2010
while
 the
figiures
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figures
figure
for
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the aquarium
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aquarium
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aquariums
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 and
festival
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festivals
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 went down in the same period of time.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, aquarium, castle, zoo, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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